2013年6月英语四级作文分析点评

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第一部分:考试分析

一:形式

1. 有图片,图片要点为:一对父子就一个问题展开讨论;

2,英语提示:a 简要描述图片;b 给出有关于主题“the importance of doing small things before undertaking something big”的观点

二.写作应对

1. 简要描述图片:

简要描述,即,描述图中主题,并引出相关的主题即可,故可以结合考研春季基础班讲义,使用描述句式如下:

A:简单型

As we can see from the picture,there are two persons, debating about the importance of doing small things before undertaking something big, who are a father and his son.

B:复杂型

As is vividly depicted in the picture, two men ,who are a father and his son,are talking about what should be done firstly,the small thing or the big ones.Simple as it is, what the picture conveys to us is thought-provoking.

2. 判断写作类型:

题干中有明显的两种观点,即先做小事,或者大事,只不过,出题人要求学生写的是关于先做小事的重要的意义,故可以使用两种观点对立的“观点分型”写作模板带入如下:

第一段:说明现象

第二段:观点讨论

第三段:观点总结

3. 主题

该主题,可以被分为三个部分,即:

A:the importance of doing small things before undertaking something big

B:doing small things

C: doing something big

以上三个内容在每段中确保出现1-2次,该作文便不跑题。

第二部分:例文写作与模板对比

第一段:描述图片+说明现象

As we can see from the picture,there are two persons, debating about the importance of doing small things before undertaking something big, who are a father and his son. Recently, the issue of the importance of doing small things has aroused wide concern among the public. Especially the young generation living in the big cities, they tend to do the big ones firstly, paying no attention to the fact that this behavior may pose underlying threat to their precious life and may even endanger others.

(原有模板)

Nowadays/recently, the phenomenon/ issue of …… has arouse wide concern among the public. Especially the young generation living in the big cities/metropolis, they tend to do sth, ignoring/paying no attention to the fact that this behavior may pose underlying threat to their precious life and may even endanger others.

第二段:观点讨论

Does anyone claim the same attitude towards this issue?Definitely not,actually,opinions vary from person to person.Some maintain that the doing some big is beneficial to students.However,quite a few people hold the opposite opinion that the doing some big is detrimental to the youngsters, and they think that the merits of students’ doing some small things far outweigh its demerits.To my way of thinking,we should know the the importance that why we must do small things before we undertake something big. If we know the significance,we will choice the right way and do the right things.

(原有模板)

Does anyone maintain/claim the same attitude towards this issue/phenomenon? Definitely not,actually/in fact,opinions vary from person to person.Some maintain/argue/hold/claim that something is beneficial to sth.However,quite a few people hold the opposite opinion that something is detrimental to sth .The demerits/disadvantages of sth. far outweigh its merits/advantages.

第三段:观点总结

the problem of doing big things firstly mentioned above will bound to generate severe consequences if measures should be adopted before the thing get worse.What we should do is to encourage the merits and diminish the demerits to the least extent. It is high time that all of us ,parents,educators,and the authorities, make combined efforts to let young men know the importance of doing small things before undertaking something big .With these measures taken, it is reasonable for us to believe that this problem can be perfectly solved in the near future

(原有模板)

To my way of thinking\From my perspective, The problem mentioned above will bound to generate severe consequences if we keep turning a blind eye and deaf ear to it.

Measures should be adopted before things get worse.What we should do is to encourage the merits and diminish the demerits to the least extent.It is high time that all of us ,parents,educators,and the authorities, make combined efforts to put an end to this situation.We should appeal to the relevant administration departments to strengthen supervision over.With these measures taken, it is reasonable for us to believe that this problem can be perfectly solved in the near future

总结:

改作文中,第二段落内容容易较为单薄,故建议同学们将原模板的第三段内容中,我的观点写到第二段的结尾处,已调整三段之间比例。

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